W.A.L.T put lots of detail in our story
what we did is explain what we did in summer we done this because our class chose to and what I think I done well was that I did a very good job with my writing. What I think I should do better next time is make it a bit more interesting.
when you went to the beach
and you ran across the hot burning rocks and sand.
And you bombed in the water and made a big splash.
And you squeezed your hands in the nice warm sand.
And you could smelled all the sweet fresh air.
And you saw all your friends running in excitement
Remember that time when you see the sprinkles and sparkles on the salt water.
Remember how the seagulls were so annoying when they were squawking?
That was summer.